Lucid Writing Advice III

This scene is tied in knots with she said she said. Since we know that Marie and Jean are the only people talking, and that Jean turned to Marie, its pretty obvious it was Jean who started the conversation. Delete all the she said, and replace it with description of the characters. Here is that passage rewritten:

Dialogue serves a purpose: like the piers of a bridge, or the water in a swimming pool. That purpose must will the story forward. Below is an example of dialogue that moves the scene forward.

The dialogue in this scene should tell you, without even stating it directly, that Aldora and Thomas have left the feast to go search for the sword. To diverge the guest in noticing their absence, Aldora has ordered the maids to bring in more wine. From the dialogue we know that Thomas hates the vault.

And like Aldora, your dialogue must be determined

Each scene should act as an individual word, when connected together, should form a complete story. You must strive to create a scene that moves the story forward and keeps to the base of the story. As aforementioned, a forgotten scene is worse that a bad scene.

Write from the heart and soul. You can always edit later. Don’t worry about something that you have written that has nothing to do with your manuscript. And also like I said somewhere above, you and the delete key can always become good friends.