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Submitted by reader (Feb 05, 2006)

With all due respect, this was an ok sorry but to improve it u must you should start by making the storyline more to do with the science fiction genre and to have a more clear plot, if you improve these aspects i think this could turn into a good story and good luck on wirting in the future. im sure youll make a fabulous writing someday. knid regards a reader... =)