Comments to Rescued by Keith Kitchen
Submitted by Anonymous (Apr 13, 2006)
The story itself was not that interesting. Our hero overcomes obstacles with luck rather than ingenuity: surviving the crash, surviving the probe striking the pressure tent, even the rescue.
I think the whole point of the story is the existence of ETs and some people have less than excellent parents, wives and friends. I already know all that, (at least I believe ET is out there somewhere) therefore, not very interesting.
You hooked me well! The impending crash of the Destiny and the foolishness of panicking people was great! At a time when we would be establishing a lunar colony, wouldn't we have space telescopes capable of zooming-in on the crash site and we could look for survivors. Let our hero spell SOS in the lunar dust in big letters using the rover. Maybe have the probe contain supplies for his survival. The irony of damn near killing him while trying to help him can be funny. Let him fix the radio with his radioman smarts and have him talk with his mother or father or ex-wife as if they might never see one another again. It could be very human and real, while at the same time embarrassingly public, since the whole world might be watching the rescue attempt. It would certainly make the evening news. Good Luck.