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Submitted by Hereford Eye (Mar 21, 2009)

Lose the allusion to the vampire novels. We don't need to know who you were writing to or about and the poem stands on its own just fine. Recommend you look at and marveled that I could still walk this earth and feel - just feel anything." I think it would work better as and marveled that I could still walk this earth and feel - anything." You haven't lost your touch. Well done. Dan

Thanks for your suggestions.....I wasn't sure people would recognize what i was talking about. And the word change you mentioned was an option I had considered.