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Submitted by Bseri77 (Jul 06, 2005)

Nice poem. Is "lade" lake? I'd add spacing in between some of your lines ie. before "You used to take me here all of the time." This will give the reader a chance to visualize the imagery you are trying to create. Suggest "that tree" be "the" tree. "I would" sounds hard; try I'd instead. I get what you're trying to say but the words don't seem to run right. When the moonlight shining down was low and dim Keep writing.....!