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Submitted by Alexandria (May 18, 2009)

First of all, I would like to tell you that I found the first part and second part quite enjoyable. I became lost (plot wise) as to what happened in the third. Besides making the plot a little more clear when it comes to the end, there is only one other critique that I could add: be sure not to start too many sentences with the same word. In part 3, after the break, the second paragraph has three "The" starters in a row. Overall: I enjoyed the sophistication of the read. Good luck!