Comments to The Owl and The Eagle: Aristonice by Meghan Sullivan
Submitted by FriedEyeball (Jun 20, 2005)Yeah, I really like it. It's got great storytelling and feels physical and sensory too, like all of your work.
Double plus good.
Submitted by seancuig (Apr 21, 2005)It's beautifully written. I found it flowed much more smoothly that the previous piece (though I enjoyed that also).
I am struggling with Far Striker though? The name stands out like a sore thumb, and seems not to match up with the other names/places or the time.
I really like that the descriptive narrative is not overdone. I struggle when things are over-described and find myself having to re-read sentences, however with this piece, this is not an issue at all.
There are a few typos and spelling errors, but who cares about that :-)
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