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    1. DailyAlice
      DailyAlice
      Thrinidir,
      Please let me know whether you've received my previous message. Don't know what I'm doing.
      Where did your name come from? Mine's from Little, Big. DailyAlice
    2. DailyAlice
      DailyAlice
      Hi, Thrinidir,
      No, I haven't forgotten you. It's more likely you've forgotten me. This has been a bad, bad month for me, with visiting relatives, car repairs, and a convalescing pneumonia patient sucking up oxygen in the livingroom. But I finally got a chance to spend some time with Realms of Speculative Fiction.
      I admire your enterprise. Your blog looks great and provides lots of information and eye interest. This is what the computer is for. (I'm old enough to rmember a world without them, and to have observed some the the ways they've f**ked us up.) This sort of site-building and community-gathering is quite beyond me, and I find it miraculous.
      So I'll criticize only the things I know something about. Here's some humble advice.
      Pay close attention to your prose style. This applies to everyone. Edit yourselves and get someone else to edit you. Pay close attention when an easy turn of phrase (aka cliche) springs to mind. This will keep you from peculiar statements like "eager to sink my teeth into this epic doorstopper," which is a classic mixed metaphor. (You don't munch on doorstoppers, you trip over them.) Or then there's "literally drowned with imps, orcs, goblins," etc. The word "literal" has a specific meaning and should not be used for casual emphasis. Try "virtually" or "metaphorically" if you must. (My husband has declared war on all adverbs; they should be rationed.) The famous joke based on this faux pas is when someone said of a minister that "he's literally the father of his flock."
      I did notice a hesitation to get tough with your subjects, so that you use a lot of qualifiers: really, very, a bit, etc. That just mushes up your style. And there seems to be a tendency to refer to books as easy, harmless reads although they may not be particularly original or compelling. As a reader, I am not looking for a harmless read; I want top quality and I want it now. This is probably inevitable given your amateur-status vehicle and the fact that you are receiving expensive books for free. Your first responsibility is to your readers, however, and the only way you'll get them to trust you is to write as carefully, succinctly and truthfully as you can.
      Remember that you are offering opinions to people who are capable of having their own. The only thing you have to offer is an *authoritative* opinion, and that is based solely on your ability to write well and speak your mind clearly. Also, don't be reticent about hamming it up a bit, employing whimsy or even sarcasm. Have fun. People read for amusement, and that applies to reviews also.
      I'll go now and let you get over hurt feelings. Just think of me as a nasty aunt who teaches English. (I never did but I was a copy-editor at one time. I am, moreover, probably old enough to be your, um, considerably older relative.)
      Your passion for your subject does get into your writing, and it works well--just needs a little technical tweaking.

      Cheers and be happy in your work--DailyAlice
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