Hook me in 25 words or less

Discussion in 'Collaborative Stories' started by MrBF1V3, Sep 5, 2007.

  1. N. E. White

    N. E. White Moderator Staff Member

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    Ha! That's a good one WindowBar.
     
  2. Aether Monkey

    Aether Monkey hack-wit

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    I second that motion l--brillant WB!
     
  3. Hoodwink

    Hoodwink contains traces of nuts

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    Ten characters make a valid post, apparently.
     
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  4. Gkarlives

    Gkarlives Mystic and Misfit

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    I saw Cloud snorkellers in the sky. Their needle claws etched glorious art that fell on my face as rain.

    Ok Hoodwink, I want the story. I just have to know about a world with Cloud snorkellers!:D
     
  5. Pookiejmk

    Pookiejmk Loves Writing

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    “Simplicity is a virtue. But alas, how simple can it be to split one’s head open with an axe?” announced the weapons trainer.
     
  6. MrBF1V3

    MrBF1V3 aka. Stephen B5 Jones

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    Just a little literal doodling.

    B5
     
  7. The Lord of all Things Inane

    The Lord of all Things Inane 1CoolNerd

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    "I do my best work one on one," Said the hooded figure, "Just you, me, and scalpel makes three."
    CDN
     
  8. moose1942

    moose1942 Amateur Author

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    Rozinante dude that's chilling.

    Here's the opener to a novel I finished writing a while ago.

    Here's the first three lines to another novel I'm working on.

     
  9. Ramirez

    Ramirez Art Student

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    Here's my shot:

     
  10. The Lord of all Things Inane

    The Lord of all Things Inane 1CoolNerd

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    Good stuff, Moose. You wrote a novel? That is cool! What is it about?
     
  11. The Lord of all Things Inane

    The Lord of all Things Inane 1CoolNerd

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    Why does she have to die?? WHY!!?? Bronzed breasts are so hard to find, you should definitely kill someone else.
     
  12. Chuffalump

    Chuffalump A chuffing heffalump

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    'Keep reading this book or your family ends up in the mincer.'

    (Apologies if it's already been done.)
     
  13. The Lord of all Things Inane

    The Lord of all Things Inane 1CoolNerd

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    There were two things John Hood could not live without, pizza, and the warm fuzzy feeling he got from killing people with his bare hands.
     
  14. Sonja Ravenscroft

    Sonja Ravenscroft Mask Specialist

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    "The papers swirled above my head in a fanciful pattern; not that I claimed to be an expert in such matters, as the blast rifle punctuated the point nicely"
     
  15. Luya Sevrein

    Luya Sevrein Humble Grifter

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    "You will enjoy these twenty-four words, or I shall slice through your head with this meat cleaver. You do not deserve twenty-five."
     
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    "$1000 Reward, Dead or Alive" - but this was the first time a dog stared back at me instead of the usual harden criminal mug.

    Someone gasped. Sitting up, I found myself staring back at a room filled with people with no idea how I got there. I hate Mondays.

    Tiny bearded men were hacking at the remains of my new washer and dryer. I gave up and went to the laundromat.
     
  17. CJay

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    "I gotta piss" Jeremy said
    "Go then, your chances of getting hit are slight." Michael said over the cacophony of artillery.
    "I'll hold it."
     
  18. MrBF1V3

    MrBF1V3 aka. Stephen B5 Jones

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    I can't believe this thread is still active. Go us.

    B5
     
  19. Red Dobbs

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    "For five hundred years the planet has been dying. Even the oldest of souls cannot remember the bounty and happiness the planet used to produce.


    I love this thread! There are so many now that I will only say this
    MrBF1V3 is very good at the hook.
    Bob Lock was funny
    Power to the J had a couple of good ones
    Oh heck there are just too many...Luya, Sonja, and the lord of all things Inane were good too...just to name a few more!
     
  20. TJ1

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    grew some

    :eek:
    He spat into the blood seeping from her head wound and dyeing the half-eaten candyfloss by her cheek.
    'Let's roll, Dee.'