Hook me in 25 words or less

Discussion in 'Collaborative Stories' started by MrBF1V3, Sep 5, 2007.

  1. JangoLee

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    "Are you calling me a liar!?" Pinocchio screamed and pointed a futuristic looking gun at the Gas-Mart clerk as Pinocchio's nose began to grow.
     
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    The sign on the Gas-Mart door read, "No Futuristic Looking Guns Allowed On Premises." The Squid-Man sighed and climbed back on his Octo-Steed.
     
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    "I have a monkey on my back, and it needs to be fed," Detective Mitchell said, as the pet monkey on his back pointed a futuristic looking gun at the Gas-Mart clerk.
     
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    "You're probably asking me why on Earth I did that. Well, I can't tell you, because you're a corpse. Yes, I know I'm talking out loud. Shut up!"
     
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    The author shed a tear, for she had just finished her masterpiece, "The Adventures of Tamponina, Scourge of the Outlet malls," and would soon have enough money to buy back her soul.
     
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    “Listen Mac, I don’t care what you call it, angel dust, pixie pooh, or cherubim chuff,” growled Chicken Little. “the sky is falling.”:D
     
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    Comming back to the main topic - I prefer good book than good start. Often after promising begining the rest blurs.
     
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    Moonlight stole through the open window brushing the razors edge to flash a silver white warning through the gloom.
     
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    Nice!! I like it.
     
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    I know it's a bit predictable.. :rolleyes:

    brian
     
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    "He frantically began searching for the other end of the android's damaged central wiring socket; he could hear the band of sdfue drawing nearer.."


    brian
     
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    "The saints wiped their mouths and arose from the table, satisfied of their banquet feasting on idols, demi-gods, demons and other offenses.... a burp.."


    Or another on the "eating" theme:

    ""..Well-browned and crusty on the outside, tender inside, juicy, a bit spicy, not too much bone.." "-What was his name?" quiried another curious alien.."

    :eek:
    :D


    brian
     
  13. Andrew Leon Hudson

    Andrew Leon Hudson and Noumenon was his name

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    The orchestra began again; but, as the composer listened with closed eyes, in the spaces between the notes she thought she heard a different music.
     
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    Luya Sevrein Humble Grifter

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    I was shot. Three times. Heart, lung, head.

    I died.

    And then I woke up.
     
  15. kongming

    kongming www.voxnewman.com

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    ..........
     
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    Upcoming novel teaser

    This desperate medieval thief thought stealing the necklace would be the hard part, but pawning it for coins would be the real adventure.
     
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    After observing the brain and skull fragments splattered all over the wall, the assassin with a sawed off shotgun breathed a sigh of relief.
     
  18. Amel

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    Quite fun indeed!

    Despite the enlightenment achieved through nanotechnology, humanity still solved its problems by pointing a gun at them, guiding a missile to them, or nuking them.


    Starchaser's is nice and graphic! Definitely makes you interested in the reason behind the scene! A lot can be derived from that single sentence! Assassins are usually masters of stealth, yet this one totes around a sawed off shotgun! The sigh of relief also indicates there was reason for the assassin to panic, it's quite the loaded statement. Plus there's blood and skull fragments. You can't go wrong with those.
     
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    Father Roach zipped his pants. He walked over to Mother Superior and grabbed her bare ass. "God, that was good," he said into her ear.
     
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  20. MrBF1V3

    MrBF1V3 aka. Stephen B5 Jones

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    It all started when George finally woke himself up and found his right leg was missing.
    "That's messed up," he said.