[Erebus]

It's great to see that our STORY (http://www.sffworld.com/ubb/Forum5/HTML/000161.html) has started. Thanks so much for picking up the reins, An8el!

I thought I would start up this separate topic for anyone who wants to comment on, make suggestions, or discuss the tale as it progresses.

[An8el]

I was excited about this too.
I logged on today to read if anyone else had continued the story and saw sanclemente99 had done some more!
I've only done this kind of group story once before. It wasn't with people who usually wrote stories, so the tone of the piece would change with different writers. I noticed just from the three of us it reads pretty evenly as if one person wrote it. I wonder if that will continue as it goes on?
My last experience with this was that people tended to introduce too many mysteries and not exploit the ones that had been previously introduced. So I'm eager to see what happens with us. I'll wait a few more turns before I contribute another round.
Are we limiting our repeated contributions so more people can participate?
Franis

[Erebus]

Hi An8el...yes, it's great to see that we've made some progress with our story. I guess there's really no rules as to how many times we each contribute, though it would be great to see some more contributors. But, by all means, if you have something else to add, then add it! http://www.sffworld.com/ubb/smile.gif

I'm curious to see how the trip to the diviner goes and wonder who'll continue that story line. But, even now, I can see that if we get enough support, the story should develop well. And yes, even with just three submissions, the story is flowing quite well!

[Aleya]

This is much harder than I had thought. It's so easy to introduce things without having to plot through the consequences. Pulling the threads together later seems harder.

I like it so far though! I will contribute, it just may take me a day or two since I have a deadline tomorrow and one on Thursday that just won't wait.

Aleya - http://silver-oak.com

[Aleya]

Okay, so I couldn't resist it, I posted already http://www.sffworld.com/ubb/smile.gif You are bad, bad people making me waste this precious time. Don't you know I have deadlines! http://www.sffworld.com/ubb/biggrin.gif

Aleya - http://silver-oak.com

[Erebus]

Thanks Sanclemente99 and Aleya for running with the ball - the story seems to be moving along nicely. Is anyone going to get back to Neffer's visit to either the herbalist or the diviner, I wonder? This thread seems to be still somewhat up in the air. I suspect that one of you has something up your sleeves for her perhaps... http://www.sffworld.com/ubb/smile.gif

[Erebus]

It was great to see that Dennizm has added an interesting twist to the tale. Hmmm, a conspiracy or sorts, hey? Well, I couldn't help myself after reading what we had so far and saw an opportunity to pull a few of those excellent threads together to achieve a satisfactory conclusion to the first chapter, which I have called Herbs and Crisis, btw. http://www.sffworld.com/ubb/smile.gif

So, what fate awaits the unsuspecting herbalist? How will our depressed imp handle this latest crisis? Who are the mysterious co-conspirators, and what is their evil plan? And, just how much does Gnash really know?

Roll on chapter two...

[An8el]

Gawd erebus, you killed our two "lawful good" characters!!
Really interesting reading what happens and try to make sense out of what others have written...not at all like I imagined the story at certain points.
I would have landed at least one of these characters at the healmakers...but to kill them off sure makes "a sense of foreboding" effective!
Hmmmm. Wonder what would happen if two of us posted at once...a bifurcated storyline? Guess we'd have to turn it into an alternate timeline story then!
I can't wait to see where the story has gone since I last logged on. I assume it's such a "page turner" for me because we're writing it together.

Franis

[sanclemente99]

So I brought them back.

Or did I?

Next!

[Erebus]

Sorry about that, An8el...I guess it may have come as as surprise, but that's me! http://www.sffworld.com/ubb/smile.gif I think it makes for interesting reading though and gives the story a definite direction now. We've all managed to set up an interesting premise, create a fair amount of mystery with the characters already introduced, and now we have a tragedy and a possible conspiracy! All the elements of a great first chapter, don't you think?

I was mindful of your comments about other stories you'd participated in losing their way a little. Hopefully we can all steer ours to a satisfying conclusion though. But I've got to say, it's a lot of fun! http://www.sffworld.com/ubb/smile.gif