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hscope
January 20th, 2002, 05:46 PM
Hi
I'm new to the site and looking for feedback on my short story, EarthSale. All comments appreciated and I'm happy to reciprocate.

Regards
hscope

estranghero
January 22nd, 2002, 05:59 PM
Where? (Sorry, I'm lost. http://www.sffworld.com/ubb/smile.gif)

hscope
January 22nd, 2002, 06:33 PM
Hi estranghero
Sorry, but I don't understand your reply.
I was referring to my short story, EarthSale, which was posted on this site a couple of days ago. I'm looking for feedback on the story and would be happy to comment on other stories on a reciprocal basis (i.e. you lok at mine, I look at yours)
Cheers
hscope

estranghero
January 22nd, 2002, 07:38 PM
Oh sorry, what I meant was that your story is on the sffworld.com site? http://www.sffworld.com/ubb/smile.gif

estranghero
January 22nd, 2002, 10:46 PM
Hey hscope!

Finally found it. Hehehe it's a pretty good story. I found myself grinning at the right moments and you could almost turn the whole thing into a socio-religious rant against human cultural mores or something. You definitely got something there.

Since this is a constructive criticism forum, my only complaint is the B.L. Zeebub motivation. (Should I place a spoiler alert here?) It just doesn't fit with the whole tongue-in-cheek approach of your story. But aside from that, it's pretty well-done. http://www.sffworld.com/ubb/smile.gif

Anyway, keep on writing!

hscope
January 23rd, 2002, 10:40 AM
Hi estranghero
Thanks for the comments & glad you liked the story. I had hoped old Zeebub would bring his reputation along with him and this would gloss over the motivation aspect. I'd better take another look at it...
Many thanks again.

Cedric Frost
January 23rd, 2002, 11:06 AM
I enjoyed your tale! It was light and easy to read. From where did the storyline develop?

Cheers

hscope
January 23rd, 2002, 11:14 AM
Hi Cedric
Thanks for your message. I think the original idea stemmed from the fate of the dinosaurs. I thought maybe they didn't die out, but instead were taken away. I can't explain how the rest of it came about. I must have been in a very receptive frame of mind and all these interesting ideas popped into my head.
Also, many years ago I rebelled against (and was quite bitter about) my Catholic upbringing and this was a chance to stir the pot!
Cheers
hscope

Taylor Brooks
January 23rd, 2002, 01:52 PM
I just wanted to let you know that i really enjoyed your short story.You have talent and i look forward to reading more of your stories.

hscope
January 23rd, 2002, 03:38 PM
Thanks, Taylor. Your comments are very much appreciated.
Cheers
hscope