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Monty Mike
August 15th, 2005, 11:59 AM
Poems never interested me much, but today I decided to sit down and write one. Here it is:

Purple Purpose (http://www.sffworld.com/community/poem/589.html)

Any comments are welcome :)

Evil Agent
August 15th, 2005, 01:10 PM
Pretty cool.. some nice rhymes there. I fooled around with some poetry in my later teen years, and early twenties, but I've given up recently. I prefer writing stories, since poetry is just so... well, vague! :)

But that wasn't bad at all, especially for a first poem.

Monty Mike
August 16th, 2005, 06:06 PM
I'm in a Poem mood lately :D Let me know what you think:

God's Blood Brother (http://www.sffworld.com/community/poem/600.html)

Thanks :)

St. Rapier
August 16th, 2005, 06:48 PM
Interesting, a solid poem. Who is this God's Blood Brother, an angel or god or something?

I also have a poem on the site if you (or anyone else) wouldn't mind taking a look.

I Promis You Treats (http://www.sffworld.com/community/poem/534.html)

Would it be better as a short story?

BTW: i liked Purple Purpose too.

Monty Mike
August 16th, 2005, 07:31 PM
I also have a poem on the site if you (or anyone else) wouldn't mind taking a look.

I Promis You Treats (http://www.sffworld.com/community/poem/534.html)
What a fantastic poem! And one that deffinately should remain a poem :D

I left you a comment on the actual page ;)

St. Rapier
August 16th, 2005, 08:06 PM
Thanks! I love that game (BGll), it's a classic.

"Live by the sword...Live a good loooooooong time!"

.....just one of many gems

JamesL
August 17th, 2005, 08:23 AM
"Go for the eyes, Boo! GO FOR THE EYES!"

Another classic. ;)

Monty Mike
August 17th, 2005, 09:22 AM
Just to say - I've now finished
God's Blood Brother (http://www.sffworld.com/community/poem/600.html) . It has four verses :)

Tari
August 24th, 2005, 10:07 AM
i dont usually enjoy reading poetry with rhyme but you had me sucked in, so to speak. Rhyme if not used properly can sound cheesy but you use dit well there. i enjoyed Purple Purpose

~ Tari