feed back on my short story

[dwduck]

I'm new to SFF World and my short story was just published on this site and I would like some feedback from other users. You can read the story here in SFF World in the other's section under the author name D.W. Hoskins. The story is "Whatchu Gone Do?" but it's spelled here Whatcu Gone Do? just a minor typing error so just disregard it your feedback is greatly appreciated.

D.W. Hoskins

[Erebus]

Hi, DW, we'll move this into the Writing section for you. http://www.sffworld.com/ubb/smile.gif

Okay, and to make it easier for folks to find you, this is the LINK (http://www.sffworld.com/authors/h/hoskins_dw/fiction/whatcugonedo1.html) to your tale.

[This message has been edited by erebus (edited February 05, 2002).]