[gabador]

Last post was a bit screwed up, so now I have submitted the two chapters. You can find it somewhere, so far I haven't been able to, but it's name is Duel, by Gabor ferencz & Dwayne webster. PLEASE Write me back some feedback!

[Erebus]

Sorry for the mix up there, Gabador, and thanks for your submission. It usually takes us about two weeks to check and process our submissions, so look for yours in a week or two. I shall post a link here once it's up. http://www.sffworld.com/ubb/smile.gif

[nicba]

I read the prologue before it was deleted or modified and I enjoyed it very much.

It was well written and flowed really well. I liked the way you described the old wizard, gnarled staff and all.

The only criticism I can think of is that it may not be very original. The wizard instantly got me thinking 'Gandalf!' and for some reason I felt that the battle at the end was a little D&D-ish. But originality usually don't bother me that much. As long as the story is good and well written, I'll read it anyway.

I didn't have time to read the rest of the chapters at the time, and when I looked in later the post had been edited by erebus. But I'll read on as soon as the next chapters appear in the short story section.

[estranghero]

Where...?

[gabador]

thanks for that. I have Tried to make it as original as possible, as I have made magic and people kind of different. I created a new world, but I guess that I have been influenced too much by the books I have read. I suppose the appendix that I have attached with the story may help explain some.
But thanks for te input

[nicba]

Hi gabador

The originality bit isn't a bad thing, at least not in my opinion. Definitely not a cause for you to edit or rewrite anything.

After all, I only read the prologue. The originality will most likely become evident in the tone of the story, the plot, the characters or the setting along the way.

The different magic and people and your new world wasn't really introduced in the brief scene I read. But that's not a bad thing either. It just shows that you have successfully avoided to swamp the reader with boring info-dumps. It will probably shine through if one read more of the story.

[gabador]

how long did you say this usually took? Do I receive a notification if my piece has been put up or not?
And afterwards will I be able to edit the posted book?

[daigoro]

Hi gabador, usually it takes a week or two for us to process submissions. It all really depends on how much time we're able to spend on the site and of course how many submissions we get.

As for your submission I would expect it to be added to the site in the next update, probably this weekend or early next week.

You will unfortunately not be able to edit the submission once it's up, I don't have the backend database to support that at the moment, but it's definitely in my future plans for the site http://www.sffworld.com/ubb/smile.gif

[Erebus]

Gabador, your story is now posted, so as promised, here is the LINK (http://www.sffworld.com/authors/f/ferencz_gabor/fiction/duelp1p1.html) for other members to go and have a look! http://www.sffworld.com/ubb/smile.gif

[gabador]

Hi, now that the post is up, what do you reckon, can I have some feedback? Be brutal.