The Limera Conflict-New Opener PLEASE REVIEW AND COMMENT

[Megris Vernin]

Below is a link to an opener for a new story I am writing, called the Limera Conflict. It begins with a battle between unknown alien forces and a human fleet. The plot occurs in many different time lines, each occuring to further the plot. Please feel free to review and comment


http://www.sffworld.com/community/story/1171p0.html

[Mock]

Only read a page, and it's really interesting, but you might want to think about changing the name Galactic Alliance. Seems to cliché/Star Warsy. But it's your story. Do what you want. Just keep on writing; it's looking good. ;)