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NDHansen-Hill
January 19th, 2006, 11:49 AM
BloodWorks - first chapter:
http://www.sffworld.com/community/story/1196p0.html

The Hollowing - first chapter:
http://www.sffworld.com/community/story/1194p0.html

Thank you!

Cheers,
ND
Mark13
January 22nd, 2006, 06:39 PM
This is very well written. Your dialogue is realistic and your characters are well drawn. Honestly, I've read published fiction that was nowhere near as good. If I had to make any recommendations, I would suggest a little more visual descriptions, but this is not necessary.

I'll have a look at The Hollowing next.

Best wishes,
Mark13