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Tari
February 12th, 2006, 01:35 AM
I've written a new poem. . .i suk at editting poetry so any advice on improvement would be appreciated. . .

I've been fiddling a bit with repetition of words and phrases lately and this is one result that turned out slightly better. . .

WRITING ON THE WALL. . .

Rememberance of pain.
Blood. Fear. Guilt.
Christ's sacrifice relived.
Blood. Fear. Guilt.
Stigmata.

Voices only you hear.
Mind. Heart. Soul.
Word of the others.
Mind. Heart. Soul.
Possession

Questions of the soul.
Black. White. Red.
Answers to be sought.
Black. Red. White.
Good and Evil.

Relief of pain and torment.
Fall. Defeat. Relief.
Acknowledgement of existence.
Fall. Defeat. Relief.
Exorcism.

All this because of writing on the wall.