Critique: My new story :)

[darrenreid]

Dear all

i have just posted a story in the story section and was wondering if anyone with a bit of time might have a read of it and offer me your opinions. To give you an idea, it is a precursor to my first novel which is a mix of fantasy and science fiction. Anyways, let me know what you think, the story is "Prophets of the Shadow" by Darren Reid

thanks!

Darren

[Dawnstorm]

Here be the link (http://www.sffworld.com/community/story/1244p0.html).