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tiawood
February 21st, 2006, 10:44 AM
For those who remember me a few months ago from this introductory: http://www.sffworld.com/forums/showthread.php?t=12346 , I forgot to upload my outlines! :eek:

Trimon - War of the Lands (http://www.trimonwarofthelands.com/) is going to be the internet's first novel. The outlines I promised are here: http://www.trimonwarofthelands.com/outlines.php

What do you guys think of this idea? Do you think I'm on to something or wasting my time?

choppy
February 21st, 2006, 06:21 PM
Hi Tia,

Great website!

I'm not sure what you mean by "internet's first novel." There are a lot of novels on the internet already - some you can read for free even.

As far as the outlines go, I read the story outline and I'm a little confused as to what the story is about. Is it a story about Larry Whiteman writing a story? Or is it the story Larry Whiteman wrote? Personally, I tend to shy away from anything written in a "journal style" - just because I've seen too much of it.

The character outlines remined me more of some kind of role-playing game than a novel. I don't mean to imply that's bad. Maybe you've come up with a great new idea - merging the novel and a role-play environment. I don't know what's been done in that area.

Good luck with it!

tiawood
February 22nd, 2006, 11:41 AM
I'm not sure what you mean by "internet's first novel." There are a lot of novels on the internet already - some you can read for free even.

I haven't seen anything similar to what I'm doing. Although, I can't say it doesn't exist. Of course there are eBooks. But this is slightly different. I'm basically a starving artist trying to start a career by writing. It's something I've wanted to do all my life. I choose to do it this way because it cuts out all the middle men and I can get my story to readers faster.



As far as the outlines go, I read the story outline and I'm a little confused as to what the story is about. Is it a story about Larry Whiteman writing a story? Or is it the story Larry Whiteman wrote?

Thank you. I'll rewrite it and see if it clears things up.


The character outlines remined me more of some kind of role-playing game than a novel.

The purpose of that is to spark the readers imagination of how the characters might be, without giving away the story before it's time.

I appreciate your comments. They greatly helped. :)

Tia