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May 7th, 2006, 06:41 PM
I'm currently writing a novel that's been brewing for years (the concept is older than my SFFworld membership).

It's working titled The Aimless One. It's a character centered fantasy story with a mystery plot. Instead of action, battles and lots of magic, there are many characters who are trying to figure out what the hell is going on, who they should trust and whether it's better to collaborate with political oppononents or to push your own agendas.

So far I have ~37.000 words, and I'm wondering if I'm on the right track. All I'm really interested in at this time is to see whether the story has the potential to engage interest. So, if you find the story boring, stop reading and tell me how far you got before you lost interest.

Any inconsistencies you find, or criticism you might have is most welcome, but probably won't be incorporated until the thing is finished. (I have my own criticism I'm ignoring for the time being.)

So, instead of a summary, here are the provisional chapter headings:

Part 1: Feyshore Paperwork; Message; Runaway; *Paranoia on the Brink of Sleep*; Interrogation; The Dancing Faerie; *Chain of Command*; Past, Present, Future; Seasick; Holy Halls; Tori; Council Meeting; Beginners Luck; Museum; Whispering Shadows; Circus; Blood on the Sheets; Hospital; Offer; Face the Factions; A Saint's Relic

Part 2: Suz Confession; Irony; Chaos Sorcery; Miracle Child; The Roving Village

Chapters between *^* will likely be cut; but pieces of information may have to be re-distributed, so I'll keep those "chapters" for now. Most chapters will be renamed (or they may just be numbered; or I may do away with chapters altogether...)

If you're interested, PM me with your e-mail adress and preferred format (doc or rtf; I suggest rtf, because it makes the file smaller; I can also zip up the file with Win-zip, if you like).

May 7th, 2006, 08:42 PM
Congratz on getting so far !! Too bad I have a gimp computer and no MS Word. All mine is done on WordPad :(

May 8th, 2006, 01:02 AM
I've been known to read a few things, every so often.

It sounds interesting. See PM.


May 8th, 2006, 01:35 AM
Thanks, for the interest so far.

A clarification, though: I do not have a finished draft yet.

There are 2 parts so far (and part 2 is only now launching into it's main focus); I imagine the finished draft will have 4 parts. (3 might suffice, I'll see.)

I'm posting this early, because I feel I'm currently stuck in a rut. Writing is easy, but not particularly engaging. Which is an odd experience for me, as usually words come hard to me, but I either love or hate what I write (at the time of writing). So, I'm worrying that it's got a bit boring lately.

Other people's perspectives tend to refresh mine, and vitalise the writing. :)

Congratz on getting so far !! Too bad I have a gimp computer and no MS Word. All mine is done on WordPad :(


An rtf-file (rich-text-file-file... oops, I shoud say an "rtf", hehe...) should open alright in word pad. It's basically an improved txt-file with all the formats (such as bold, italics, colour, indentures...); it does not include macros etc. Since I have a very old Word-version (Word 7.0), I tend to request rtfs, as well.

So, thanks again. Preparing sendover of files. :)

May 8th, 2006, 02:09 AM
Send it over Dawnstorm, I will try and look at it inbetween real life hitting me between the eyes lol....

May 8th, 2006, 02:38 AM
Send it over Dawnstorm, I will try and look at it inbetween real life hitting me between the eyes lol....

Thanks, it's on its way.

Real life has far too good an aim... :eek: ;)

May 8th, 2006, 11:43 AM
Ready, willing and able :) I've just read a very good fantasy political piece and am interested in reading some more.

Hereford Eye
May 12th, 2006, 01:20 PM
It's everything you'd expect from Dawnstorm...and more! This is very, very good stuff! Tell the man to quit devoting time to erudite posts on sffworld and spend more time completing this work.

May 12th, 2006, 04:21 PM

Why, thank you, sir.

I've spent the last couple of days planning and once I pick up writing again there should be a torrent. :D I expect to start this weekend; perhaps today.

May 23rd, 2006, 06:46 AM
43.7k words, according to Word.

I'm having trouble with a scene.

Two days ago: Try to write, find no approach. Research instead.
Yesterday: Write. Words ooze rather than flow. They're so dull that I quit and delete in frustration.

As far as the novels theme is concerned, it's a key-scene. I can't just delete it. One of my characters has a personal problem, and only a political opponent can help. The problem is tied up with what makes them political opponents. They do not have any personal contact, otherwise, so each will few the other as an example of their respective factions.

The character with the problem doesn't really want the help (she's stubborn); the character who might be able to help isn't opposed to helping, but it's neither very high on his priority list, nor does he think chances for success are very good.

The character herself didn't ask for help: one from her faction asked for her, but she didn't ask the guy who could help. Instead she asked someone else on that guy's faction who talked to him.

So, basically, I have two people caught in an interaction none of them personally cares for; both are there because others urged them to. There is no obligation, but refusing to help, or refusing to accept help is equally embarrassing for both parties. So they end up discussing personal stuff with people they view primarily as political opponents, where the woman with the problem is more uncomfortable in the situation, while the man who could help is more uncomfortable with the person.

The problem, however, is that whether or not the man actually manages to help has implications on how they'll view each other's factions in the future. So I can't really move on without writing this first, as the specifics how it plays out has implications on how the following ensemble scenes play out (with inter- as well as intra-faction tensions at stake).

Phew, typing this out helped. I might actually split this scene in two and spread it over two days (intermission-style). Hm...

The thing's progressing, and I know, generally, where it's supposed to go, but it's getting complicated on the concrete level. O.o


Edit: Saying thanks to all my test-readers. There's nothing like a different perspective on the thing to push me out of the rut I'm stuck in. :)