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Skaidon
June 29th, 2006, 11:38 PM
I have 2 short stories added to the site and they are my first attempts at writing, both loosely fit within the science fiction genre I think, so, please tell me what you think! :)

It's 2006 (http://www.sffworld.com/community/story/1575p0.html)
It's Cold Here (http://www.sffworld.com/community/story/1574p0.html)

Thanks!

Skaidon
July 10th, 2006, 03:14 PM
Nobody interested in giving me some feedback? It would be greatly appreciated! :)

Expendable
July 15th, 2006, 11:57 AM
The dreamlike quality at the begining of "It's 2006" has some pull, it draws the reader in, makes them curious. A good start.

Not sure if I like the end as much. Very abrupt. But it's good reading.

-Ex.

Skaidon
July 15th, 2006, 02:35 PM
Thanks, maybe I did end it rather abruptly - but, I was losing places to go with it, making it over long would be worse, in my opinion.

Thanks for reading and the feedback, much appreciated!