Story for Critique

[kitsune_boy389]

Sorry. I had to delete it.
Mods, please close this.

[Rob B]

Please go through our short story/literature community (http://www.sffworld.com/community/) where you can post your writings. Once your work is posted, start a topic linking to the story and people will provide feedback.

It will help keep the forum a bit smoother.

Best of luck!