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Protagonist
October 17th, 2006, 01:50 PM
This is a story I'm working on for a while, more will follow on as I go through it but I'd like to know what you guys think of it.
Critism is welcome so go ahead.
Thanks in advance.
http://www.sffworld.com/community/story/2004p0.html

Dazzlinkat
October 29th, 2006, 11:32 AM
Great story! It just drew me right in.


Neither was it the concern that made her muddy green eyes that sparkled even in the darkness waver.


This part was a bit confusing.

Would definately like to read more.