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January 11th, 2007, 10:31 PM
Work in progress, but I figured I'd share it.

The darkened land of Rellmith lies
A bit north of long-lost Kale.

In the land there lives a man reknowned
Who sneaks about in shroud and veil.

Yellinek the Yellow, the previous king,
was known for his drunken tales.

He would brag and bellow and laugh all too loud,
'Till the sleep of oblivion assailed.

The Prince, Young Yorin, wished to rule strong,
And went to the enshrouded men.

He outlined a plan to kill the old king,
And bring power to the endarkened land.

The man smiled and nodded and smiled again,
And drank to the outlined plan.

Young Yorin was found with a knife in his throat.
His body asprawl in the dark.

King Yellinek the Yellow lived twoscore years,
'Till his heart failed his grace near Triiarc.

None's more cursed than the kingslayer, 'tis said,
Except perhaps for the killer of kin.

A man who lets blood of his own taste his blade,
Is a man who will soon feel its bite.