Moko's Wake Feedback

[Kyle McCallum]

Hey everyone, this is my first post so I was kind of hoping for some feedback on what I have of my story. Give me a shout if anyone has anything to say.

Link to Moko's Wake; Hand of Fate (http://www.sffworld.com/community/story/2543p0.html)

[kater]

Moved this to the Writing forum Kyle, where all the opinion/critique requests go. Welcome to sffworld :)