[James Somers]

Hey everyone--

Here are two other short stories I've uploaded.

The Silent Cry (http://www.sffworld.com/community/story_edit.php?pid=2621)and The Meeting (http://www.sffworld.com/community/story_edit.php?pid=2622).

These are sort of in the Horror genre--at least suspenseful anyway, not gorey.

I hope you guys will pop over and review them? BTW uploading your stories on the board like this gives a spot for reviews and comments and allows other members of this forum to find them as well. A WORLD WITHIN already has had 162 views! :eek:

James

[BrianTubbs]

Brian--

A well done battle scene: I especially like the fact that you take the reader into the battle rather than a passing view. You get the reader down deep into the particular movements of the battle and those involving the protag are focused so close one might bob or weave to duck the spear coming at you.:eek:

That's the way I personally like to read action: move for move--the nitty gritty of it.

Did you know, you can load up your short stories on this board? I loaded up A WORLD WITHIN (http://www.sffworld.com/community/story/2564p0.html)already. Check it out if you get the chance and review it.

James

Thanks, James. Another critic said that she was impatient with Nathan, because he was "astonishgly ill-prepared" for the battle. I was trying to show that this was his FIRST battle, and that no matter how much tournament or classroom training he had, it was no substitute for the real deal. But if that didn't come across, maybe I need to make him a little more "prepared"?