fantasy novels

[ConorReilly]

Just a post advertising my website which has a few samples of my novels...Just looking for opinions cause so far all I have is my mams and my best friends. Thanks...The site is : http://www.angelfire.com/empire/crnovels/index.html

[Erebus]

Thanks for the post, Conor, but you don't need to repeat it elsewhere on the forum - once is enough, so I have removed the duplicates :)

[milamber_reborn]

I just read a little bit and I like the detail. There are some grammatical errors, but otherwise it sounds like a good story and well told.

One issue I had was how you started writing in the typical tense (eg. The room was small, dark and dampened.)
Then you change to a different tense (eg. Tur is a small hunting village...)
It should be Tur was a small hunting village... It may sound as if you are saying that Tur once was a village but not any longer, but it is the proper way to write in the tense you started with.