[Talaith]

Yay! I have a story up! :D If anyone would care to comment on it I would appreciate it. It is a bit long though and in three parts just so you know.

Cheers!
Talaith :D

[Erebus]

This LINK (http://www.sffworld.com/authors/c/cardea_talaith/fiction/lastdayp1p1.html) will help you find part one...

[Holbrook]

Hi, Talaith.

Having read "the last day of the war" since almost the moment of it conception and right through it's growing "years" I find it hard to find anything to say and am looking forward to what others will think of it.

But I have got a few points m'dear.

"Angel" I have always found her a little hard to relate too in the first stages of the story. She is maybe a bit too professional in her work and seems to glory in it a bit. Though maybe you want her this way to portray her culture. It's only in the final section back in the "symphony of light" I finally get to know and like her.

The major I think is underdeveloped and I would like to see her fleshed out a bit more.

The way you handle the battle scenes and combat are as always good and this version seems to have polished them up a bit.

The flow, once the action starts is fast and furious and I am glad you stuck to the first person in this, it is your strong point and puts my efforts in the same viewpoint to shame.

Best old H.

[Holbrook]

I am bumping this up for my dear Lady Talaith, who is back from their adventures....;)

So folks if any of you would like to review the Lady's work?????