A New Short Story needing feedback!

[DecKrash]

I think I put this thread under the wrong subject the first time, guys. But I have a short story posted in the short stories section that really needs feedback. Could you help a guy out? It's called "Love of Inspiration", and it's by me, "Brandon Hill." So gimme some feedback if U can, please. I really appreciate it. :o)

[someguy]

I normally dont do this because I dont think I am good at it.

Dont expect a lengthy review, not my style.
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I like your prose. I enjoy the way you put together senteces.

[Forrest]

Originally posted by DecKrash
I think I put this thread under the wrong subject the first time, guys. But I have a short story posted in the short stories section that really needs feedback. Could you help a guy out? It's called "Love of Inspiration", and it's by me, "Brandon Hill." So gimme some feedback if U can, please. I really appreciate it. :o)

You already know I think your story kicks ass.

[milamber_reborn]

Didn't get time to read much, but it reads very well and is interesting. I just don't personally like first person.

[computer]

u hav a way with words brandon as do a lot of people but ur book is not for me
i only read the 1st three pages and i lost interest, maybe if u added an actual fight between good and evil it might hav got my attention a bit more...i know i sound bloodthirst for wanting more violence in it but im afraid that is just me. i fink ur way with words does justice to ur work but it really isnt for me

but keep writing tho

marc