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December 13th, 2002, 04:38 PM
Oh Boy! I've been waiting a while for the next update. I have three stories posted at sffworld and right now i'm gonna post them right here and ask everyone you comes across this thread to read and comment on them. I would really apreciate this since i'm planning on sending the off to publishers right away.
Anything you could write would help, alot.

Primus - First Strike (http://www.sffworld.com/authors/a/azure_kalos/fiction/primusfirststrike1.html)
The Long Farewell (http://www.sffworld.com/authors/a/azure_kalos/fiction/longfarewell1.html)
The Horsemen (http://www.sffworld.com/authors/a/azure_kalos/fiction/horsemen1.html)

Kilroy Was Here

December 16th, 2002, 04:19 PM
I'm not letting this one die
-PS they've all been edited quite a bit since posting. Stupid me, i sent them in before really looking them over.

Kilroy Was Here

December 16th, 2002, 04:57 PM
Haven't had time to read them all but I read Horsemen and would suggest you look at it again, there are several spelling mistakes - probably typo's, misuses of a word and also a few grammatical errors. Also while its a good story the narrative is a little disjointed and needs polishing before sending it to the publishers. Good luck.

December 16th, 2002, 05:11 PM
Ok read the others rather than revise - I like Primus much more but both need quite a bit of polish, you really need to read them again a few times to weed out the errors.

December 21st, 2002, 08:52 PM
back to the top

Kilroy Was Here

January 1st, 2003, 07:09 PM
Definitly not letting this die

Kilroy Was Here

January 1st, 2003, 09:31 PM
spammings not cool, if you have something contructive to say, say it, otherwise, don't bump. It just annoys people.