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January 14th, 2005, 02:09 PM
Being the genius I am, I only just noticed the community feature after all these months :o Anyway, I pasted a story into it, one that's got me some mostly positive feedback in the past. It's a ghost story about a cursed village and its mysterious visitor. One good thing is that you won't have to think much, I dislike doing that in the evening. Its fairly light entertainment, but prob isnt good enough for people to enjoy it. Anyway, comments would be really appeciated if anyones got the time, I dont mind if not.


January 14th, 2005, 02:45 PM
Welcome to the community, watch your community control panel for feedback and visits.

January 15th, 2005, 07:56 AM
Thanks expendable, I will; ur name is ironic :D

January 17th, 2005, 01:15 AM
It's a fair story, a little dense but a good simple read. I didn't make the connection until the sailor found out about the boy being dead.

January 17th, 2005, 11:24 AM
Thanks for reading, Expendable :)

March 4th, 2005, 03:04 PM
It is well written with only a few grammatical errors. Other than that, it was easy to picture yourself in the story.

Of course, now I have to ask a favor from you, critique my stories


and this is the second part