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Jamza1986
January 14th, 2005, 02:09 PM
Being the genius I am, I only just noticed the community feature after all these months :o Anyway, I pasted a story into it, one that's got me some mostly positive feedback in the past. It's a ghost story about a cursed village and its mysterious visitor. One good thing is that you won't have to think much, I dislike doing that in the evening. Its fairly light entertainment, but prob isnt good enough for people to enjoy it. Anyway, comments would be really appeciated if anyones got the time, I dont mind if not.

http://www.sffworld.com/community/story/184p0.html

Expendable
January 14th, 2005, 02:45 PM
Welcome to the community, watch your community control panel for feedback and visits.

Jamza1986
January 15th, 2005, 07:56 AM
Thanks expendable, I will; ur name is ironic :D

Expendable
January 17th, 2005, 01:15 AM
It's a fair story, a little dense but a good simple read. I didn't make the connection until the sailor found out about the boy being dead.

Jamza1986
January 17th, 2005, 11:24 AM
Thanks for reading, Expendable :)

tooeviltoknow
March 4th, 2005, 03:04 PM
It is well written with only a few grammatical errors. Other than that, it was easy to picture yourself in the story.

Of course, now I have to ask a favor from you, critique my stories

http://www.sffworld.com/community/story/255p0.html

and this is the second part

http://www.sffworld.com/community/story/300p0.html