June 19th, 2006, 05:18 PM
GhostShell: Thanks for your comments. The disjointed structure is something others have pointed out as a weakness. Unfortunately, it's integral to the story. That's one thing I can't change (though I might tone it down by re-arranging once the thing is done). People do say it gets better later on.
On the other hand, it is a rather slow book. Don't expect to breeze through it.
Mage-: on its way.
Been naughty today. Haven't written a word. (I blame the heat.)
I think some scenes may have to be re-written from a different point of view (the blander ones).