I think the real question here is: Shouldn't there be a comma after "Oh" in the afore?
I would also like to whole-heartedly agree with milamber_reborn, though. I have noticed that my writing is markably better after after or while I am reading a good novel -- and I do find myself thinking about the author's style. It's both a good and bad thing. It's like being in a drama class... you have more appreciation for what the actors are going through, but it makes it that much harder to suspend disbelief and accept the story (in my experience, anyway).
Edit: "[A]bove" changed "afore" as the post was unceremoniously shunted to a new page. :P