Jarred and David had found a spot to hide in the body-height shrubbery (why is it body height? is it manicured this way? young growth?)
above the small cliff (what does the cliff overlook? what sort of rock makes up the cliff face?)
. They had been still and silent for the last fifteen minutes.
Jarred was no stranger to being patient, though this was testing it, and time spent waiting was time he wasn’t getting back. David, on the other hand, was fidgeting (with what? is he shifting around his whole body? picking loose skin from his nails? etc. is this a repetitive habit of the character?)
“It’s taking a while,” David whispered.
“She’s gotta be stealthy,” Jarred replied. “You can’t rush stealth.”
“I’m getting worried.”
At that moment Modok appeared (how? is he out of breath? burst on the scene or sneak up? how did they not see him from their high vantage point?)
, and the three of them instantly looked more alive. But they didn’t see Jessica with him. David
“Tesla Squad rescue Modok,” the half-troll ascertained. “Modok not like stupid bandits.”
“Jess?” Jarred ventured.
“Oh, right,” Jessica’s voice exclaimed, right before she appeared beside Modok (same question - appeared from where? how?)
. “Oh, that feels better.” (what feels better?)
“Shooty girl rescue Modok,” Modok said. “Modok in shooty girl’s debt.”
“It was nothing,” Jessica said. “Just another everyday mission to rescue a troll from some bandits. And the best part is they probably don’t even know you’re gone!”
That was when the sound of vehicles revving greeted them from the street (where did this street come from? is it below the cliff?)
, as footsteps came pouring up the steps (where did these steps come from?)
“Run!” Jarred ordered. The group gladly obeyed.