Placing his hand on the boy's head Devan
felt that he had a fever.”Did you give him the juice of the herbs I gave you?” The mother nodded.
“Yes,three times a day like you said.”.
looked back at the parents.
“Please step out so I can have a look at his wound.” The mother shook her head,
only for her husband to take her hand and lead her out.
Pulling the covers back Devan shook his head at the smell [Is this an appropriate response? "Wrinkled his nose", perhaps?]
. Looking at the bandages Devan
could see that they were moving.
“ I hate this part,
whispered as he pulled back the wraps to see maggots in the large wound on the boy's right leg. He is going to die unless I do it, Devan
thought as he looked back at the closed door. Rubbing his hands together Devan looked the boy over one last time [This example is okay - once in a while is fine, but it should be underused if it is used at all]
. Placing his hands at the boy's head and chest Devan
began to pour his energy into the boy. Live!Live!LIVE! Devan
thought as his eyes glowed a bright gold and his hands [plural]
shone like the a star [singular]
in the night sky.
The boy lat out a small gasp as his wound began to heal,maggots began to
from the glowing wound as it to shone brightly. Pulling his hands away Devan fell
his head making a thump as it hit thumping against [or something similar]
the cool wood. Blinking Devan
looked up at the husband and wife. [They had left the room - their return should be noted]
“Gorgo,Meilso, is he all right?” [This is a very strange place to finally give us their names - on first appearance would be better]
Gorgo nodded as he looked Devan
over “Whatever you did,
he is sitting up and eating.”Devan
nodded as he sat upright
on the floor. Looking up at the boy eating and staring down at him Devan
smiled.”So,what did you do or is it one of your tricks?” Gorgo asked
and stood up.
“Just some good old praying I'm afraid.”.Gorgo stared at Devan
for a long second before nodding “Just praying huh? Maybe Meilso has a point about that stuff.” Devan
knew Gorgo was a smart man and was not one for the Old Ones but he also knew he would not ask a question that he did not need to know.