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March 10th, 2001, 12:20 PM #16Keeping The Equilibrium
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Hi Lior,
Glad you got something from my suggestions and editing, and I really hopes it helps you on some level!
My short story should be up next week, (Ghost of Elysium) but the synopsis and extract for my first published novel, "Reflections" has now been posted! (If you downloaded the PDF file from my site, Lior, then you've already seen this!) I've started a separate topic for some feedback on this, but I'm still waiting for a response. It's a few pages to read so it may take some time before I do!
Cheers, Neil
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March 11th, 2001, 03:45 AM #17Junior Member
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I read the story again and I found that I didn't get lost. Being who I am I only paid attention to how close I was to the conclusion, but I found that aroun pages 14-19 I still got lost. I think it's because of what's happening at that time in the story.
-Gotenks
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