Well, that's an interesting question you raise, Will.
I guess a story is finished when you've completed the story you set out to tell. But how you go about it is a matter of personal style. For instance, when I write short stories, such as Ghost of Elysium, listed here at SFF, I try to tell a complete story in about 1000 to 3000 words; a story that will usually end with a suprise or twist or in some cases, an heroic type ending, ie: great, the good guy got his revenge after all - that sort of thing, or, at other times, an example of fateful irony.
In a larger story, novella or novel, you need to have an interesting beginning that will grab your readers' attention, a plausible and explainable middle, and of course, a worthy conclusion to the tale you have led us all through over the last however many pages of text!
How you finish your tale will depend a lot of times on how you begin it. It's never a good idea to start a story if you don't know where it's headed, unless of course you want as much of a surpise with the ending as your reader may get! I find it's always better to have a plan in mind, and quite often, I think of an ending then work backwards.
Everyone will have a different method of course, and how you choose to write your stories will determine your overall writing style. Just remember, they always have to have a start, a middle and an ending, but the journey between is what the reader looks for. So, don't make it too long, and don't rush it. The length of a story should be how long it takes you to tell your tale, depending on how many subplots etc. you decide to include. Remember, longer isn't always necessarily better, but a rushed tale will also be painfully apparent to the astute reader.
Anyway, I have read your two tales here as requested, and I think that Character would benefit greatly from the use of paragraphs, more commas and semi colons! The Freezer left me a little bewildered, to tell you the truth, but I enjoyed them both nonetheless!
Check out my short story mentioned above, and the extract from my first published novel, Reflections, if you like; they're both posted here. I also have topics posted for both if you have any feedback. You can find out more about my writing at my Erebus site:
www.wn.com.au/clubclad/erebus/
Regards,
Neil
[This message has been edited by erebus (edited March 14, 2001).]