Critique Appreciated. Thank you!

[emil]

Hello everyone! About a year ago i posted a part of my work in progress here and i found very helpfull people like bobnagga, kmtolan, sterling13 and Expendable to help me. Since then i haven't done much writing since the problems in the real world took centerstage. Now that i solved some of those problems i am thinking about restarting. I would appreciate any critique and advice and thank you for taking your time to read it. English is not my native language so i apologize for any errors. Thank you!

PS: The text was too big so i had to upload it as a word doc. sorry.



http://www.mediafire.com/?7t38czq6wrab95j

 

[MisterKeitel]

I'd gladly look over your work, but I'm just too damned afraid of downloading something from a source I know nothing about. There are plenty of people out there who LOVE to infect the net with viruses. Post it on a blog with a link.

 

[Sparrow]

Only a fool would download something from a source unknown.

Simply copy and paste a short excerpt from part of the story you're particularly proud of and we'll tell you what we think of it.

 

[emil]

Hi guys, here's a link to a blog.

http://halftimetalk.blogspot.com/2010/12/legend-of-elim.html

thank you!