Deciding what to cut and what not to (and why are so many successful books bloated?)

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One of the common writerly advice that gets bandied around is some variation of "Kill your darlings" or "cut the first few pages of your novel and start when the action starts," or "get rid of anything that doesn't move the plot forward," etc etc. There is a common view that a book should be as trim as possible, or at least include nothing but that which moves the plot forward in some way or another. Yet on the other hand, this seems to counter to the success of so many books that are--by that logic--bloated, overlong, and prone to tangency.

Again and again I read reviews and views on classics that they are overly long, "I don't know how the author possibly got this by an editor," or "It took me 200 pages to get into it," etc. Yet there the book is, with a long history of sales, even classic status. Think of Robert Jordan's Eye of the World, even the first, or Tad Williams's Dragonbone Chair, Raymond Feist's Magician, and on and on. Or what about Lord of the Rings, which the long and, some would say, gruelingly drawn out early sequence in Hobbiton? So many of these very successful, popular, and beloved books are terribly guilty of all the things a writer shouldn't do, yet there they are, firmly ensconced in the hall of classic fantasies.

So what gives? And more specifically, how does one decide what should and should not be cut from a manuscript? Or do you just trust your agent or editor, and hand in everything and let them take the scalpel to your hard work? Should the writerly advice be trusted, or should we look more to the actual books? Any articles or interviews that you recommend that talk about this?

(I apologize if I'm not quite making sense...it is very late and I'm about to go to sleep...I'll revisit this thread on the morrow, to try to re-clarify if need be)
 
I think readers can enjoy settling down into a huge world, especially one by a trusted author. They don't mind a slow beginning because they have faith it will lead somewhere.

...But when slush readers/editors have hundreds of long manuscripts to look at, they are looking for something that grabs their interest immediately. If it's a new writer they (or a random reader) can't be 100% sure this writer is skilled enough to take them on an adventure no matter how winding the road.

Arguably you could say both examples above should have 'conflict' on every page etc, but I think there is a slight difference there that explains what you have noticed.
 
When @Teresa Edgerton edited Abendau's Heir she made me put about 6 chapters in - 4 of which I had previously cut. The trick isn't just being brave enough to cut but also being brave enough to give space and time for a story to breathe - something I still struggle a little with :)
 
Good questions, Alchemist. I certainly wish I had the answers. Lord of the Rings, as you mentioned, is a prime example of what might be considered "bloat." Or how about all of the James Michener novels that basically begin with the first snail crawling across the region's primordial ooze?

Nowadays, in all facets of culture, there seems to be prejudice against the ordinary -- thus, if a story doesn't open with the explosion of six or seven planets, it's not a story. Nevertheless, deep within us lie the same myths that underlie the Garden of Eden: Change and progress always come at great cost -- the sacrifice and loss of the mundane. Hobbiton (an idealized Anglo-Saxon time of simple village life) is Tolkien's Eden. It works because he makes it interesting. Not easy.
 
Cut the boring parts.

And remember that a book which was released fifty years ago may well not sell if released in the same form today. If I remember correctly, Lord Of The Rings didn't become popular until years after it was first released; unpopular books are usually dumped by the publisher within weeks these days.
 
...But when slush readers/editors have hundreds of long manuscripts to look at, they are looking for something that grabs their interest immediately. If it's a new writer they (or a random reader) can't be 100% sure this writer is skilled enough to take them on an adventure no matter how winding the road.

This is a good point, that perhaps a lot of the advice given is to new authors trying to attract attention and be read by slush readers. On the other hand, I think I read someone say once not to worry about the hypothetical slush reader and just focusing on writing the story you want to write (and read), with the caveat that it is best to try to make things interesting from page (and paragraph) one.
 
When @Teresa Edgerton edited Abendau's Heir she made me put about 6 chapters in - 4 of which I had previously cut. The trick isn't just being brave enough to cut but also being brave enough to give space and time for a story to breathe - something I still struggle a little with :)

I like that a lot. I think this falls in the category of pacing. Too much action and it becomes tedious; too little and it...well, becomes tedious in a different way. But finding that proper oscillation between movement and stillness is key.
 
Cut the boring parts.

The problem with this is that it really depends upon the individual. I find too much fighting to be quite boring, while I often enjoy a nice bit of expository conversation, listening to the characters talk about their world. So, boring to whom?

And remember that a book which was released fifty years ago may well not sell if released in the same form today. If I remember correctly, Lord Of The Rings didn't become popular until years after it was first released; unpopular books are usually dumped by the publisher within weeks these days.

Good point. Yeah, LotR really took off when it hit the American market, about a decade after it was first published in the UK. I think also with a more global market, something that doesn't work in one market might do quite well in another. We can call this the "David Hasslehoff Effect." ;)
 
Good questions, Alchemist. I certainly wish I had the answers. Lord of the Rings, as you mentioned, is a prime example of what might be considered "bloat." Or how about all of the James Michener novels that basically begin with the first snail crawling across the region's primordial ooze?

Nowadays, in all facets of culture, there seems to be prejudice against the ordinary -- thus, if a story doesn't open with the explosion of six or seven planets, it's not a story. Nevertheless, deep within us lie the same myths that underlie the Garden of Eden: Change and progress always come at great cost -- the sacrifice and loss of the mundane. Hobbiton (an idealized Anglo-Saxon time of simple village life) is Tolkien's Eden. It works because he makes it interesting. Not easy.

Maybe it is a very interesting snail! Seriously though, I love what you say here and like the idea of bringing "magic" to the mundane. I've also always liked the formula of starting off in a womb-like "home," whether it is Hobbiton or Faldor's Farm (Belgariad), Two Rivers (Wheel of Time) or even Solace (Dragonlance). Then Something Happens...but that something has more impact if the reader feels resonance with that home. It might not even require more than a short chapter to do so.
 
Well, I would rarely use a big name author as an example - they can pull off a lot of stunts that might not work for new writers. Mistri was right about readers tending to tolerate more from a proven author. That said, I generally would look at any writing that doesn't forward either the character or the story as being suspect. Had one novel that the publisher told me carried too much description and parted with six thousand words of excess. Usually, I depend on my editors to clue me in on what's not working.

The biggest culprits, I suspect, have to do with an author wanting to show off this grand world they created, or just having fun with relationships that otherwise contribute zero. Trouble is, all of this is subjective. You may want scenes that serve to immerse the reader more into the world or character, but does seemingly little to advance anything. Had a lot of dancing in a series I wrote because it was part of the culture, and in that case it worked. In other cases, maybe not so much. Also, you might want a scene put in to slow the pacing and give the reader a chance to catch their breath. No easy answers here, I'm afraid.

Now, if your reader starts skipping through pages, then yeah, you've got some trimming to do.
Kerry
 
Okay, let's break this down logically. All of the advice bits you are mentioning are from the 1980's. In the 1980's -- a time of many large books -- it became a popular school of style to promote minimalist writing -- where the narrative is as close to a film/t.v. screenplay as possible: minimal description, minimal poetry, imagery or metaphor, minimal exposition, trying to shove almost all information into dialogue with minimal dialogue tags and plenty of snappy patter, emphasis on violent and stunt action, short chapters and sentences, minimal to no adverbs, no third person omniscient viewpoint format, show don't tell, etc. -- all of the ones you most commonly hear bandied about even today came from this particular school of writing stylistic preferences that became popular in the 1980's. It was a style particularly pushed for suspense fiction -- mysteries and thrillers -- where it could work very well. There have been a number of highly successful thriller writers, some still alive and producing, who naturally have that style (and sometimes also did screenplays,) and if that style interests you, they are worth studying: Robert B. Parker, Carl Hiaasen, Elmore Leonard.

Were most of the novels written in the 1980's short and using the minimalist style? Absolutely not. Minimalist, action-focused stuff was a slice of the market, with no more or no less chance of best-sellerdom and being made into movies than other types. The biggest authors of the 1980's all pretty much wrote large novels, though they also wrote short fiction, there being still more of a magazine/short fiction market left then -- Stephen King, Judith Krantz, Tom Clancy, James Clavell, James Michener, Danielle Steele, etc. But movies were considered much higher status than novels at that time, so a lean and screenplay like style sounded good to a lot of people and attributes of that style were then passed around as writing guidance, declared necessary for writers to follow because that always makes the advice sound more authoritative and expert.

Science fiction, fantasy, and SFF horror stories are primarily suspense fiction and a lot of the time have a fair amount of violent action, often being war novels or adventure stories. So naturally, that idea of a minimalist style worked its way into SFFH too. But SFF stories have to, sometimes quickly and sometimes in more complicated fashion, establish an entirely different story universe, even if it's near future SF or contemporary fantasy. Those stories tend to require more framing and scaffolding, with exposition and description, than most realistic stories, to convey the info about the new universe. So while the minimalist style can work in SFF, especially in short fiction, it tends to be even less of a slice of the SFF market and isn't most of the time a natural fit for the personal writing style and interests of SFF authors. Publishers were being able in the 1980's, for a variety of market and distribution reasons, to do longer books more often and SFF authors, no longer as often originating out of and training in short fiction in the magazines, and with much of their stuff highly unlikely to ever be dramatically adapted, quite often went for stories in bigger, more epic scope, particularly in fantasy. And they sold. If you didn't do that, you also could sell -- the market likes variety and that includes a variety of styles and lengths.

So if the minimalist style was never dominant, even in its heyday, why is it still so persistent thirty some years later in advice to writers? There are a number of reasons, such as: 1) we still prize film/screenplays more than novels in the general society, so anything that sounds movie-like sounds good; 2) it's a way of distinguishing current material from past classics -- even though many past classics were short, some of the best known are large and so it was a way of saying the narrative was "modern" by not being Victorian-ish; 3) the advice got enshrined in writing advice books, many of which have simply been revised and reissued over the decades, and so it's simply become folk wisdom that people hear and repeat; 4) newer writers are believed to be mainly awful at many things and it's assumed most of them will meander and lack focus, so the bromides of the minimalist style are an easy set of instructions; and 5) many established writers tend to repeat the advice because it's been around for so long, even though they themselves don't really follow it, and if it comes from a high-selling author, it must be gospel to some writers who then further repeat it, etc. You also have fans who really do like a more minimalist style and who complain, loudly, about popular books that don't have it, which is most of them, so that tends to give the impression that it's a crushing issue, when it's really just an issue of stylistic preferences and the author's own personal style and goals for each story.

Mainly, the reason that the minimalist catch phrases have hung on is that authors are pretty much open to embracing any set of "rules" that is sold to them as a guarantee of wide approval and success getting published and selling -- the magic key, where there is one true way to write and it is the good writing and it is the golden ticket. It's understandable in a market as wide open and chaotic as fiction publishing that people would want that, (which is why I try not to take it personally when I get snarled at for pointing out that books exist in huge numbers that refute what is being toted as the true writing gospel.)

"Kill your darlings" is less of a minimalist one than one that simply says, watch what ticks you have as a writer in your prose choices. It came from Faulkner and had a burst of popularity in again the 1980's thanks to Stephen King pushing it as Faulkner's advice. Writers will tend to repeat words or do little things stylistically that come naturally to them and which may or may not be needed to be weeded out in revision. George Martin has put repetition and his ticks to good effect mostly (winter is coming;) it's something that may work, or the writer may want to catch and change it. But it's not really a cutting length issue.

"Cut the first few pages of your novel and start when the action starts" is a stylistic preference about openings and it is a minimalist trait, though many minimalist stories start with a conversation, rather than straight violent action. It's a type of opening that can work, or might not, depending on what the author is doing in the story and what sort of universe the story deals with. It's an opening that works better in SF or contemporary fantasy, where many things are already familiar, than in secondary world fantasy, but it's not unworkable in any SFF stories. But it doesn't necessarily fit the style, focus and approach that every story needs. A lot of readers like to be lead into a world first, get to know the characters, and then go into the violent action, often contrasting with the peacefulness of the world before that action starts, creating strong emotional drama at the loss, as Tolkien did with Lord of the Rings. (Or contrasting one world, usually our normal everyday world, with the discovery of another world that is very different, in both fantasy and alternate reality or space opera SF.) Tolkien was in fact using a very standard British writing style, the sort of fable-fairy tale style where you first introduce your readers to the framework you'll be using and readers can hear the plumey British voiceover narration in their heads. (J.K. Rowling also uses this style.) That style still works today, in its American forms, etc., as well. It's called a build-up. They use it in movies as well, especially horror. Some writers don't like doing build-ups -- that's not their style. So "start right into the (violent) action" sounds good to them and that's how they tell others to write. But they also are tending to do stories that don't need a build-up to launch into that violent action -- that's not their focus. For other writers, it is, because it is important to developing the story.

"Get rid of anything that doesn't move the plot forward" -- This is a minimalist value, and it's also a value of those who might not be so minimalist but want to center their stories primarily on a chain of violent action and thrills. This is a very cinematic focus, where there's not going to be a lot of inner life. The plot becomes the main focus and its structure and twists are the important part, so everything else is considered excess (minimalist.) This is not, however, what every reader wants out of a story, nor is violent action the main focus of every story. It's a stylistic focus that can work very well, but may end up sacrificing characters as not very memorable or interesting for many. And it's characters that SFF readers actually tend to glom on to as fans, more than just plots and stunts. That doesn't mean that plots and stunts can't be important. But there are numerous ways to do them and all the elements are linked, so again, depends on the story, its tone, and the author's style and goals for it. And in SFF, spending time on things that don't move the plot forward but do build the world of the story to give the plot emotional context and weight, may be essential. It's those sorts of details that many SFF readers love -- bits of science or alien culture or clothing description or old ballads that don't really have much to do with the plot but do make the story richer for many readers. Do I need elaborate descriptions of sword-fighting positions and their names in training sequences to then read a sword-fight? No, I do not but it can be flavoring.

Alchemist said:
Again and again I read reviews and views on classics that they are overly long, "I don't know how the author possibly got this by an editor," or "It took me 200 pages to get into it," etc.

Which tells you the stylistic preferences of the reviewer. Which may be helpful if you have the same preferences, but otherwise, probably not. This is largely why authors should not freak out about reviews.

And more specifically, how does one decide what should and should not be cut from a manuscript? Or do you just trust your agent or editor, and hand in everything and let them take the scalpel to your hard work?

Since many agents do not perform editorial functions and many editors don't have much time to edit your work, and in any case, are not in charge of your book, that would seem unwise. For instance, Jo says that Teresa "made" her put four chapters back into the book. This is not literally true of course. Teresa can't make Jo do anything. But Teresa did point out what she thought were possible problems and made suggestions. And Jo evaluated that, decided that Teresa's comments were valid, and decided to put the chapters back in and have Teresa look at them. So Teresa helped and probably tried to persuade where she thought it important; Jo decided. The only one who can figure out what really needs to be cut or not from the story is the author. Agents and editors don't "fix" manuscripts or write it for you. If that was the case, they wouldn't need you at all. They take you on in the first place because they already feel you've written something they like. They'll try to catch where you've made mistakes from what you wanted to do, inconsistencies, areas where it seems murky. But it's your creation, what you express, what you want to say to readers. And your instincts about what to cut and where.

Some authors cut mentally and edit as they go, ending in little revision and probably more stuff added in than taken out. That's their process. Others must meander, write reams of stuff they then don't actually use, make elaborate character and world bibles to keep track of details even if they don't use most of the material. But they needed it to figure things out. That's their process. No matter how helpful an editor is, they can't hot-wire your brain differently. You're your own guide.

And you don't trust yourself to do that and that's normal. You never will completely trust yourself. Stephen King and J.K. Rowling and Margaret Atwood all don't completely trust themselves. But they try. And as you've already noted, the marketplace has a wide array of styles, lengths, etc. So looking at what works for you will not box you out.

Should the writerly advice be trusted, or should we look more to the actual books?

Writerly advice can be mined. It's not a matter of trusting it or not because it's not a right or wrong situation. It's just suggestions, usually stylistic ones. If the advice works with your writing and your brain, it can be helpful. If it doesn't, it is not going to help you because you won't be able to understand it and/or implement it. Especially since most of said advice again tends to be saying that there is one writing style preference to rule them all, which there is not. You're searching for feedback that is helpful, not instructions. You are not assembling a piece of IKEA furniture.

The books you like and feel are close to your style and type of story will be the most useful to you. You can look at how they do what interests you about them, as we've discussed before. You won't know what they've cut from it, of course, but you can look at how they do pacing, chapter structure, etc. and then you pick and choose what technique might work for what you are doing. If you can find an article or interview where the author is talking about how they developed a work, rather than trying to dispense writerly advice to all, I find that those are the most helpful to people. One thing that might be useful is that author John Scalzi has a feature on his blog, Whatever.com, that is called The Big Idea, where he lets other authors promote their works by talking about the big idea for the work and how it developed. That's not down in the nitty gritty, but it may give you ideas for developing plot and what you want to focus on. Stephen King's On Writing is very disappointing when it comes to "writerly advice" but when he talks in the bio part about how some of his works developed, it's helpful and he has an appendix where he goes over a piece of narrative he wrote and how he thought about it, revised it, cut and added, etc. so that might be helpful.

But mainly you are going to have to stop looking for magic keys and start trusting yourself. Editors, editorially minded agents, beta readers, etc. all can help in later stages if you are looking at a cutting issue, but the idea is that you are cutting words that are not what you want to say to the readers, that may be nice but it isn't the material or the scenes or the sound that you want in those spots.
 
Years ago, though I don't think much has changed, I heard the big-league agent Donald Maass tell this story at a writers conference:

One Friday afternoon each month, he and his associates gather around a table that holds a stack of sample chapters they have asked to see, after winnowing through several hundred query letters. Now they decide which chapters to read over the weekend.

Each manuscript is passed around. Agents read the first page. If the ms grabs someone's attention, it goes in a briefcase. If it doesn't grab anybody, it's gone.
If that was the opening of a novel you spent years writing, that Friday peek was your only shot. Your story catches fire on page three? Too bad; page one didn't hook anybody.

If it's your ill luck to be in the bottom twenty of those chapters, something that might have got through in the first twenty can get passed on because everybody's already got plenty of reading for the weekend.

The lesson I took from that was: start your story where the story starts, i.e., at the point where the protagonist is propelled into the conflict that will be the carrier wave of the narrative. In simplified form, it was Louis Lamour's dictum: "have your hero in trouble on the first page."

This has nothing to do with literary considerations. Absolutely nothing. And it's nothing to do with being fair. It's about the practicalities of getting your stuff read in an industry where nobody has enough time to read.

One other thing: don't judge your chances by comparing yourself to some established author whose readers will buy the next book the moment they see it on the shelves. You're not competing against them -- at least not yet. You're competing against all the other just-hatched baby turtles who want to make it down the beach and into the surf.

Still, if you think you're as good at this stuff as George R.R. Martin, then let him be your exemplar. Go long and take your time. Just be prepared to rethink that approach if you don't score after a year or so.
 
What @KatG says above is true, of course. Teresa supplied edits and her reasoning and I decided how to apply that and if it had merit. So much of that is about the trust a writer and editor have - her in trusting me to think thoughtfully about it, me in listening to that advice. I think, to be honest, finding the voices you trust (and that can be betas or editors or critique groups or whatever) and learning to think critically about their advice is a skill that takes a writer a long way.
 
Teresa supplied edits and her reasoning and I decided how to apply that and if it had merit.
Agreed. Writing is an interesting balance between egotism and humility. The very act of putting words on paper (pixels on screen) is a declaration by the writer that he/she has wisdom worthy of disseminating, a tale worth the telling. Then comes the humble act of listening to someone else, someone who just might be able to improve it.
 
Years ago, though I don't think much has changed, I heard the big-league agent Donald Maass tell this story at a writers conference:

The problem with the story is that what "catches fire" as an opening varies by person. Maass is an agent who has particular ideas of what he wants and he and his associates have their own subjective stylistic preferences. They are looking for what interests them. But the agent who represents Cat Valente, say, isn't going to be looking for the same things. And may find an opening that does not have violent action still catches fire for them. This is part of the reason that you've got to search for an agent -- find someone who gets your work, likes the style and knows what editors are likely to like it too. Agents take on very few authors and they pass on lots of works that other agents take on. They don't agree with each other much of the time.

We would not have attempted Mr. Maass' system at the agency where I worked. (And I doubt they do it quite that way now that it's electronic submissions on screens rather than paper round a table.) We would have found it not very efficient -- we didn't have time to read stuff during office hours, that was client business time. A big long meeting each week of everybody reading the same first pages would not have worked at all. If we asked for the sample ms., we'd already done the triage via the query letters that often had writing samples, and divvied stuff up to take home and read more than the first page of it, though not necessarily the whole three chapter samples. But then we were also an agency that did a fair amount of editorial assistance. An opening we found not spectacular wasn't necessarily a problem if further stuff looked good. And that's again the issue -- agencies operate differently with different parameters. A lot of agencies do no editorial feedback at all, but they may do more PR stuff, and so on, and that affects how they read and how they view what they read.

Some agents are very much marketing oriented -- they are looking for trends more than writing they think is particularly strong. And that can work for an agent, but it can be hit and miss on how they are guessing. I had an editorial client who was a published author and also worked in British t.v. She had written a dramatic contemporary novel about a woman and a man who deal with baggage from their college past. Because the protagonist was a woman, written by a woman, that was of course going to get slapped with the label "women's fiction." (Guys just write fiction, you see, and "women's fiction" is assumed to appeal only to women readers. These assumptions are incorrect.) Because of her career, she got a reading from a fairly high powered agent who turned it down because he said that it was "chick lit" and that chick lit was "over" in the market, people were tired of it.

Now, "chick lit" was a term that came into being in the wake of the success of Fielding's Bridget Jones' Diary. It started as a derogatory term (fiction about women being only for women and sucks and is trivial, etc.) and then became the term of an actual, loose lit movement with Bridget Jones' Diary as its signature anchor, which then got broadened and established into a book-selling sub-category of women's fiction, itself a book-selling sub-category of general fiction. It remained a derogatory term also, and one slapped again on many novels written by women with a woman protagonist in a contemporary setting. But it is actually a specific thing, namely comic, sometimes fully satiric, novels about contemporary women dealing with life stuff. My client's novel was not comic. It was more in the vein of writers like Joanna Trollope. So the agent was wrong in the market assessment of the book's place. And he was also wrong about chick lit being "over." Chick lit was very popular then, especially in Britain, so it's natural that publishing people probably expressed fatigue over being sent lots of comic novels about plucky women and their careers and relationships. But far from over-saturating, chick lit is still today a mainstay of the fiction market in Britain. So even if my client had actually written a chick lit novel, the agent would have been wrong about its ability to sell. As it happened, the author found another agent, a woman, and got a two book deal with that book.

Does that mean that the agent was bad at the job? No, because the agent was good at figuring out what he wanted to sell and obviously had some success with it. But he wasn't the right agent for that work because he did not get the market for it or the book itself, and he wasn't necessarily that great at reading the market in general. And this happens all the time. So when you hear agents talking about what the "market" wants or is hot or not, etc., they are mainly guessing, and based on their own interests and beliefs, plus the demand from writers that they produce this information and not personalize it but instead make it general about the dominating force of the market (which it never is. See grimdark is not taking over fantasy and previous discussions.) Being market oriented can work very well for an agent, but is primarily based on the agent's own interests. Being more focused on books on a case by case basis and then finding a slot for a work can also work for an agent, but is again guided by their own interests.

So if you know an agent pretty well, you can wager a guess as to how they'll respond to your work. But mostly you're not going to know an agent pretty well to do that. Which is why getting agents' names from the Acknowledgement pages of authors whose work you think is in the same vein as yours may sometimes work, but not necessarily. There is no magic key, no "approach" that is always going to nail agents or editors.

Still, if you think you're as good at this stuff as George R.R. Martin, then let him be your exemplar.

But you don't have to be as "good" at stuff as George R.R. Martin (if you think he's good, which thousands and thousands of people think he is not as is usual.) Large fantasy debuts are published all the time by authors who do not have half the experience that Martin did when he started Song of Ice and Fire late in his career. They aren't necessarily brilliant, but they worked enough with some people to have those people invest in the work and put it out. I just checked out the opening of a sec world fantasy novel that I was interested in by the description, and it did start with violent action. But the style was quite different from what I expected from the description, and it was okay but it seemed a bit stilted for me and I was bored. So I'm probably not going to try to read that one. That isn't a reflection of what's going to happen to the author in the marketplace, nor does it mean he's unworthy to others or the market in general. It's one book of thousands and that one wasn't a go just for me personally. This is a personal business. It's about people connecting personally with material. And so it's a field that relies on word of mouth that is unpredictable (and often unfair and run by luck,) over marketing stratagems.

So you don't know what is going to happen -- nobody does. There are a lot of predictions; it's just that no one counts the ones that turned out to be wrong. I had two bosses, one an editor, the other an agent, who both thought that short story collections were going to vastly rise in popularity over novels on the idea that people's attention spans were supposedly getting shorter. And this did not occur. Short fiction is having a growth area due to self-publishing currently, but short fiction in book form remains mainly a niche market. Large publishers do anthologies and collections mainly as a PR thing to get authors' names out there. Smaller presses do them because they are cheap, can turn a small profit and get awards for a small press, and are a way to build up their inventory list for dealing with booksellers and wholesalers. And people with the supposedly ever growing shorter attention spans regularly enjoy enormously large novels. So much so in SFF that The Guardian ran a very silly article complaining that large novels were crowding out the field. At the same time, novellas -- short novels -- are also having a good bit of success in SFF. We have both and the middle. The books exist in all their lengths, so pretending they don't and that the styles are the same or that you need some special skill set to get anywhere with either form is not the case.

So you have to look at what you personally have and what you want to say and in what style(s) it is that you can actually do, and work that material. And then market it as part of the marketplace. I've said it before and I'll say it again -- George Martin's Song of Ice and Fire is irrelevant for what you are trying to do in the SFF marketplace, even if you are doing pre-industrial secondary world fantasy. It doesn't matter -- fiction authors don't directly compete and you are not competing with George Martin. Nor will copying Martin in any way, assuming you could do so, help you in the market. It doesn't matter how Martin or Rowling, King, Erikson, Jordan, Neal Stephenson, etc. write relative to what you are doing. The only use Martin might be to you is if you are somewhere in the general neighborhood of Song, with a very political, war-filled clash of kingdoms saga, and then that's only as a quick reference as to what type of story it is -- I'm in the neighborhood of this series you've heard of, etc. But with someone like Martin, since everybody within a stone's throw of Song's type invokes him, he's not even a great reference point. And there is no agent familiar with pre-industrial sec world fantasy who is going to be shocked if you say you have a 200,000 word epic fantasy novel. Or a 150,000 word science fiction novel, for that matter. Or one that is only 70,000 words. They've seen them all before.

Just be prepared to rethink that approach if you don't score after a year or so.

A year's too short in book publishing, I'd say, especially if the submissions are including subs to publishers willing to see it without an agent but who also take months and months considering ms. Even if you're just doing agents, they may have the sample chapters for several months. Certainly if you're not getting much response, you can go assemble your betas to figure out if there may be problems you want to address. And you can work on other projects and send them out as well and one of them may end up working first. It can be a difficult judgement call and depends on personal circumstances.

I'm not knocking Matt's advice to work on your opening; openings are important. But they are so whether a ms. is long or short. You have to figure out where the material's slot is in the market, rather than just go for an area of the market you really can't do because that's somehow the golden key at the moment -- or was the supposed golden key seven, six months to two years ago when the books you are seeing in the market were originally contracted. Being market-oriented, if you want to do that, means being pro-active rather than simply reactive.
 
KatG, I must say, this is some of my favorite stuff I've read of yours on this website - and it was really what I needed to hear. Thank you. I honestly think you should consider writing a book of advice for young/new writers on learning to trust themselves, and clearing out all the misconceptions on the industry. Sort of a killing of the sacred cows of fantasy literature - both from the perspective of readers and writers. I think you have something very important to say about SFF writing that isn't being said, and is being obfuscated by a lot of rather narrow writerly advice and views on what is and isn't proper fantasy (or SF).

So again, thank you. I will re-read what you wrote above when I am more clear-headed (I just got back from a work trip, and have been up since 5am...it is 10pm now). Actually, what you say here has sprinklings of Rilke's Letters to a Young Poet, which might be worth me re-visiting (even though I'm not so young anymore!).
 
"Cut the first few pages of your novel and start when the action starts" is a stylistic preference about openings and it is a minimalist trait, though many minimalist stories start with a conversation, rather than straight violent action.

I have rarely opened a book with violent action and that's not what I was recommending. A protagonist can be in several other types of trouble, and many of those types can be expressed in a conversation.

My usual approach is to show the main character in motion and engaged in some characteristic activity. What I never do is establish the setting, then introduce the character by description, spending several pages putting everything in place before having something actually happen that starts the story. In critiquing and blue-pencilling, I have seen many examples of that approach and, unless the writing is spectacular, I recommend against it.
 
I definitely hear what you are saying, Matthew, and basically agree with it...to an extent. It reminds me of an anecdote one of my writing teachers once told me. He was telling his young daughter a bed-time story and, not wanting to scare her, kept everything peaceful and nice. His daughter became bored and told him, "Get to the trouble!"

I've had similar experiences with my own daughters and bed-time stories. When they were younger, I would tell them about a unicorn in the forest, and her various adventures. My older daughter would grow bored and always want me to throw in an injury, so the stories would inevitably be some variation of: unicorn in her beautiful glade, something happens and she gets hurt, my two daughters would go on a quest to make things right, often by healing the unicorn.

Anyhow, clearly it is important to "Get to the trouble" in a relatively quick manner, or at least some degree of trouble. If we're talking about a novel, I would think some kind of character dilemma be introduced right away (within the first page or two), even if it is relatively innocuous. On the the other hand, this can sometimes come across as being rather gimmicky, and I find it kind of irritating how there has almost grown a culture of "clever hookism" among writers.

I think KatG's main point--or at least what I take away from it--is an argument against "One True Wayism" in writing, as if there is a formula that one must follow to be successful, because there have countless different paths and version of "success." She mentioned the influence of film-making and suspense writing, I would also add the kind of thinking you see in "get rich (or skinny or enlightened) quick" self-help schemes. What I hear her advocating for is that writers recognize the vast diversity of what is out there, and through that recognition embrace their own uniqueness. On the other hand, this isn't antithetical to learning from other writers, as well as editors and agents - but it is focused on empowering the writer to find their own, unique voice, rather than cater to some (imagined or otherwise) idea of How Things Must Always Be Done.
 
an argument against "One True Wayism" in writing

An argument with which I agree. The thing is, I'm a self-taught, intuitive writer. I had no training but I was good from the beginning and got better with time. So I know what has worked for me, which is why Maass's story resonates with me.

But I think the truth is closer to what William Goldman said about making movies: "Nobody knows anything."
 
Again and again I read reviews and views on classics that they are overly long, "I don't know how the author possibly got this by an editor," or "It took me 200 pages to get into it," etc.
Maybe because back in those days editors were not lazy and put some effort into their job instead of hunting for new “Twilight” or “Hunger games” franchise? I read a lot of editors complain that they have to read a lot of nonsense would be writers send them on daily basis. As if someone actually forced editor’s job on poor sods.

As for my opinion: I think it is wrong to cut your book and go straight for the action for editor’s sake. Almost all my favorite books (War and Peace, Tai-Pan, Game of thrones and many more) had a huge, slow opening with a lot of exposition and details.
 

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