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Yes, he does sign up for the job, even though he's not qualified for it and is traumatized. It's suppose to be a cosmetic post, for insurance purposes, and David quickly realizes that he's made a big mistake. He is not stupid, but he is to some degree hapless. I understand that the thematic stuff did not come through for you, but for me and others, it does.
As for the world-building, you have a valid point, but the underwater city is not a military sort of operation. Given the society set up in the story, I found it plausible that someone's pet kitten had gotten loose and ended up a stray. I can understand if you didn't and found that the world-building didn't work for you and that this helped make the story not work for you. And our differing points of view further emphasize that an estimate of greatness in writing is going to vary considerably from person to person, as do writing styles, tone, structure, approach at details and plot, theme, and so on that writers choose to use.
As for the world-building, you have a valid point, but the underwater city is not a military sort of operation. Given the society set up in the story, I found it plausible that someone's pet kitten had gotten loose and ended up a stray. I can understand if you didn't and found that the world-building didn't work for you and that this helped make the story not work for you. And our differing points of view further emphasize that an estimate of greatness in writing is going to vary considerably from person to person, as do writing styles, tone, structure, approach at details and plot, theme, and so on that writers choose to use.


